Editing to sound

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ORy2QUM2fK4

Frued screenplay evaluation

To show Frued's theory I attempted to write a screenplay giving Freud's Ego, Superego and ID characters.  I choose a screenplay because i find it easier than making a film. I think the screenplay went well because I managed to introduce the three characters quite clearly, which shows Freuds theory, as you can easily identify which character is what from Freuds psychoanalysis theory. However it didn't go aw well as hoped as i did leave it late to start the screenplay, so I didn't give myself that much time to create a final piece, so the narrative and character development is rushed. If I had given myself more time, then i could have fully developed the characters, showing clearly the ego, ID and super-ego.

This is a screenshot of my final scene. I tried to show the Ego (Bobby) finding a balance between the super ego (Paul) and the ID (Lar). This scene feels very rushed because of the amount of time i left myself to write it, i didn't allow myself to go into much depth. I would have like to have shown a much bigger effect that the ID has on the ego, however I rushed over their friendship and the activities that the Lar get Bobby to do. Instead of the original plan to have Lar get Bobby into alcohol and drugs and have him flying off the handle to show an extreme of the ID, i had the ID convince the Ego to skip class and not do extra circular activities, however i feel like this still shows in a small way the ID because of its nature to have its imitate desire fulfilled, it wants to skip class, so it does, no waiting for a different class or anything. I also wished i had shown the Super ego in a better light, as it is shown to be an over bearing parent, the original plan was for the super egos, job as a police officer to be better involved in the story instead of casually mentioned. 

There is also a lot of dialog in my screenplay as opposed to action. I could have described and set each scene better in detail instead i focused on the characters and there was not much description setting each location. Without much description in the scene it can be hard to interpret camera angles and lighting into it. I didn't really consider lighting when i was writing, so most of the scene don't mention lighting. I tried to incorporate what i could of camera angles for example, this scene when Paul is looking out of the window, i describe what he is looking at so that can be interpreted as a close up of them, however i didn't do much of this throughout he script.

If i were to do this again, i may have picked Lacans Lack instead, because after researching it better, i understood it better than Frueds ID, Ego and super ego and i might have been able to go in slightly more depth with the lack. What is good about my screenplay is that it is in the correct format with numbers marking the screen, the dialog, action and characters placed in the correct places and the headers correctly used. I did't get much chance to edit and spellcheck the work, so what i did god was quickly do it, which means i could have easily missed out on some typos in the work. Next time i will leave myself more time to do the editing.

  

Screenplay

https://drive.google.com/file/d/0BxA-zKgjasysYjVlSHRpWjBLYnM/view?usp=sharing

screenplay update

I am halfway through my screenplay at 1500 words, 6 pages. To stop going too far over the word count  2500, the story is going to be short with not a lot of detail on the narrative. I want to get across the main Frued theory, so i have introduced the ID, Ego and Superego. I think i have done this well as you can tell which one is which. However i am unsure of where to go with it. The original plan was to show the extreme of each freudian character. But now that the end is not that far away i think i am going to have to change it to instead of the extremes of the ego (Bobby) always following the Superwgo then just following the ID. I think i am going to skip to near the end so that when the ID is introduced it creates the balance instead of Bobby later on in the sorry needing the balance because of the extremes.

Screenplay plot

Main character
Ego
Name: Bobby
Age: 19
Gender: male

ID
Name:"Lar"
Age: 23
Gender: male

Super-ego
Name: Paul
Age: 40
Gender: male

Bobby is a normal young adult about to begin training for the police academy, who lives with his Father Paul. Paul is a Policeman who has always been strict on the rules. Bobby has always avoided by the rules, kept his head down and leaves a boring life, trying to live up to his fathers expectations. When he meets "Lar" he learns to let go and have fun, he introduces him to parties, drugs and girls but when the fun goes to far and he is risking his future, when is enough, enough.

Short film, showing the three characters. Aiming for a 30min film should be around. Aim is 2000/2500 words.




Start- Introduce Paul and Bobby and showing Paul as the super-ego
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Middle- Lar's effects on Bobby

End- Bobby balancing life with Lar and Paul.

Freud screenplay, brain storm

Mulvey in films

Mulveys psychoanalytic theory of the male gaze in film is only proven by Megan Foxs role in Transformers, this scene where she is trying to fix a car, by camera angles alone it shows the male gaze. When she is looking into the hood of the car the camera lingers on her body in many of the shots, when the camera goes to shoot her talking it pans from her waste up to her head, as to show her body to the audience. During the scene when she is doing things to the car to camera will often wonder to show her body movements instead of a close up of what she is doing in the car fro example. The mise en scene of her outfit is also very revealing, the actress is waring a crop to and shorts, although it could be argued that she is wearing such an outfit as the location of the film is in a warm state of America, however the males in this scene are wearing long jeans and in most scenes a jacket, this shows that the film is shot from a male perspective as the woman is objectified, whereas the males hold a key role and importance in the scene.